Wednesday, April 25, 2012

Response to "This Must be the Place"


Focusing on “Hill” specifically --
     I really do love the use of video as it is incorporated in this man’s story. The use of video  helps to also tell the story of the place. We are able to see our speaker, and so we understand him in a different way than we are able to in print. 
     I find it interesting that the video waits until about five-minutes in to tell how the building became abandoned and how the man came to live there. It is still a bit unclear, and maybe that is the point of the video. I also don’t believe his name was every given? This aspect is interesting because while we can see the man’s face, we still know little personal information about him. What a funny twist from the usual narrative pieces we find.
     The man’s story is uplifting in a strange way. I related deeply to when he talked about the ways in which people responded to his living in an abandoned building. I was and still am somewhat taken aback by a man choosing willingly (though we’re not entirely sure of his social status) to live in an abandoned building, but also find it cool because of his positive attitude surrounding his environment.  

CYOA - Elaine C. & Stephanie P.

The Most Dangerous Gamer 


http://www.theatlantic.com/magazine/archive/2012/05/the-most-dangerous-gamer/8928/1/


This piece, written by Taylor Clark, that profiles a game designer/developer named Jonathon Blow caught my interest despite being a non-gamer. While you read think about the various narrative elements the author employs.

-What are these elements? Are these elements employed effectively?

-What were your favorite parts of this narrative and why? What could have been done differently in this narrative?

-Do you think Clark has constructed Blow's character in an honest and fair way?

-Who is Clark's audience? How does Clark navigate or not navigate his narrative around the non-gamer? 

Wednesday, April 18, 2012

Profile Pitch --

     I am still interested in writing a profile on Dr. Grossman. I still need to check with the Index and the Kalamazoo Gazette to see what type of articles were written. After the readings for this week, I’d like to try to look at Dr. Grossman’s story from different point of view. With the upcoming memorial/celebration for him - I’m hoping to hear from several different people who had many different relationships with Dr. Grossman. From the little I do know about him, he was an incredibly interesting man who is definitely story-worthy - with a full career as a professor, a practicing psychologist/psychiatrist, and a job at the Kalamazoo State Mental Hospital. I know that he interviewed several interesting people, he came into contact with serial killers, and the list goes on. This story could have so much depth and be written from many different views - I just need to figure out which is best and which hasn't been done!

Spoiled Rotten (Revised)


     People were staring. Was I making it up? My blonde hair and blue eyes couldn’t so automatically make me an outsider amongst Hungarians ... could it? Yet I felt their hard eyes on me as I passed, careful not to utter a word in my native tongue; careful to avoid any extra attention.
     Back at my dorm, as I unloaded my arms of my several grocery bags, uncharacteristically exhausted after a trip to the grocery store, I couldn’t shake the stares. I’d been in Budapest only a few days, but it couldn’t be so blatantly obvious that I was an American student who had come to land in Hungary for a semester, could it? As I pondered, I carefully situated my “essential” grocery items onto my sole shelf (I was sharing the fridge with my three American roommates) careful to stack and shift so everything would fit. With the fridge full, my homesickness faded ever so slightly.
     Still, my mind floated to the helplessness I had experienced as I wandered aimlessly amongst the rows of food items in the corner market. There were only three narrow aisles of non-perishable foods, one short row of freezer doors, and a small section of fresh foods in the front of the store. Everything in sight, except the in-season fruits and veggies, was as foreign to me as the concept of bringing your own plastic bag to the store with you.
     I had studied and written about Hungarian culture for months before traveling to Budapest. I knew about Communism and every battle Hungary had lost. I knew that it was strange to smile at strangers, and not to hail a cab on the street, but rather, call ahead. I was fully unprepared in one crucial aspect of Hungarian culture though - the language.
     Many fewer Hungarians speak English than I had anticipated. No “crash course” in Hungarian had been encouraged through the college I attend, and the academic portion of the program was to be taught solely in English. These feats as well as two visits to a rural French town where many or most spoke English indicated to me that many people in Hungary would also speak English. I was traveling in Europe after all!
     I was crudely shaken from those thoughts upon entering the Hungarian market. While many Hungarians between the ages of 15 and 30 do speak English when necessary, it is not a requirement of Hungarian cashiers. While I was checking out, I had no chance of a warning.
     A large part of learning is through observation. My family at home almost always leaves the grocery superstore with a car load of bags. (Thanks to preservatives for not allowing us to go bankrupt). My first Hungarian shopping experience was no different.
     While the corner market, ‘Spar’, was without a cart to fully load, I managed to drag an overflowing basket to the checkout counter. As usual, spending more money than intended, and realizing too late grocery bags and groceries were not a package deal in Hungary, I managed to cause quite the stir in basic English and hand gestures. We communicated “plastic bag” with a pointed finger accompanied with a carrying motion similar to cradling a baby. Another charge of the credit card and I was off with four or five plastic bags full of fresh fruits and vegetables, a few cheeses, a package of what I assumed to be salami, and a few bags of chips with pictures of onions on the front. (I was thankful daily that I have no food allergies!) 
     Three days later everything spoiled.

     Months into my stay, upon opening the refrigerator door in a Hungarian friend’s home, food was scarce. Missing were the many seemingly essential components. Condiments that clutter my family’s fridge were unseen. It was without an individual salad dressing for each house member. It was without ketchup for my hotdog, mustard for my father’s burger, A1 steak sauce for my mother’s steak, and hot sauce for my sister’s french fries. Missing too were boxes of leftover dinners from restaurant outings alongside plastic containers from last night’s home-cooked meal. The shelves were not filled with jars of you-name-it with expiration dates years into the future.
     Hungarian food is not packed with preservatives or chemicals to extend their shelf lives or plump them up. Hungarians rather make several trips to the market per week, buying only what they are sure they will cook within a day or two.

     After that first trip I got better and better at deciphering what was good, what I could consume within a day or two, and names of certain products with the help of Hungarian friends. While proper grocery shopping etiquette made me less of an outsider in my new home, I was also taught an invaluable lesson in wastefulness. Due to the simplicity and resourcefulness of Hungarians I have gained a deeper understanding of the word necessity.

     Comfortably home in my American apartment, I take a tour of my fridge. Empty space is visible on each shelf, and I know my lesson remains. 

Franklin Outline

Complicating Focus --
Stephanie moves abroad [Hungary].
Development --
  1. Stephanie grocery shops.
  2. Stephanie makes [Hungarian] friends.
  3. Stephanie buys less [food].
Resolving Focus --
Stephanie learns [larger] lesson.

Reading Response(s)


“The American Man at Age Ten” --
     I really enjoyed reading Susan Orlean’s piece on Colin Duffy. The piece was fun and light in the beginning, but delved into something much deeper and more powerful later on. Gender socialization was the underlying tone of this article. I have been learning about this topic in my Intro to Women’s Studies course, and so I found this article fascinating. There was example after example of how young boys are taught through their peers and the media about what it is to be a boy or girl. My only issue with this piece, and it may be attributed to it’s audience or the style, was that Orlean used opinionated descriptions on several occasions. Words like “handsome,” “pretty,” and “awesome” don’t belong in a hard news piece. Because this was a narrative piece are these descriptions acceptable?
“Trina and Trina” --
     I also enjoyed reading Adrian Nicole LeBlanc’s devastating article on the young and troubled Trina. The story was depressing and filled with conflict, and had no feel-good resolution. We have been taught many times over in our readings that this is not necessarily the way to keep readers reading. Why does it work in this article? Does it work? Also, I felt that at some points I had trouble keeping up with where and when the story was taking place. It was a bit jumpy.
Telling True Stories --
     I felt that this part of the reading was largely informative, rather than entertaining. At times the information was repetitive, but I feel that I am better for having read it. I feel that I now hold many tools for good interviewing. The examples given via instruction were helpful and at times relatable. I also feel that I have a better grasp of how I want to go about writing my profile.

Tuesday, April 17, 2012

Response to "Wonder Town"


     I really enjoyed reading this article by Sasha Frere-Jones. “Wonder Town” was fun and engaging, filled with several examples and details that took me further than I had expected. 
     The non-music specific language that we were asked to look for was indeed powerful in the article. I liked the example, “The feeling was a little like being held hostage in a room with someone who refuses to turn on the lights.” (Among several others!)
     I felt that Frere-Jones used the release of the band’s newest album to discuss the nature of their old albums. The new was used to compare and contrast the old and also discuss how the band influenced other groups to work in the same manner.
     I thought the story flowed well. Frere-Jones used both storytelling, in her vivid details, as well as fact to compose to readable and believable article.

Response to "Shooting an Elephant"


     This was an interesting piece to read. I neither liked nor disliked it. You could feel while reading that it was somewhat outdated. I am interested to hear in greater depth why Ellen and Jordan decided to use this article.

  If this piece is meant to be a memoir, then I believe that George Orwell shot the elephant. If it were not for the specific categorization of the piece, I would assume that whether or not he shot the elephant isn’t all that important; but again, because it is categorized as creative non-fiction or narrative journalism, it’s truthfulness becomes important.
I believe that he shot the elephant. He seemed incredibly remorseful before and after shooting, and couldn’t stay at the scene to wait for the elephant to die. Even if he didn’t have such feelings of remorse, he may have included them to protect himself from the negative opinions of others after shooting. Either way, it seems as thought he shot the elephant.

     Orwell is sure to let the reader know that he is an outsider in his community. The reader is fully aware that Orwell is a British man living in an Eastern society. It is very interesting that while Orwell is in power, the people of the community still ultimately reign in the pressure he felt to kill the elephant.

Wednesday, April 11, 2012

Response to "Writing for Story"


     Overall, I enjoyed Jon Franklin’s “Writing for Story.” I felt that some things I knew previously were confirmed, and also that I was able to learn new things about writing that was before quire foreign to me. 
     My favorite part of the entire book (right or wrong) were those two chapters in which Franklin shared his stories, “Mrs. Kelly’s Monster” and “The Ballad of Old Man Peters.” While both of these stories are powerful, both in their actual story as well as Franklin’s writing itself, “The Ballad of Old Man Peters” particularly spoke to me. 
     I have been dealing with some serious anxiety lately. Paralyzing anxiety. I read this story of Wilk Peters and felt inspired and ashamed all in one. I have been given every opportunity to succeed and at times work toward damaging this privilege with my incessant worrying. Wilk’s thoughts from page 51 of “Writing for Story,” made me stop completely, and think very hard. “What if something happened ... What if he got sick ... What if he lost courage?” 
     Making one look at themselves and learn something in return was an idea Franklin frequently talked about as being important in writing a successful short story. Franklin lays out a very sturdy and seemingly foolproof guideline as to how to make such stories a success. I feel that he does it so eloquently and that I have hardly a chance, but maybe now with his tools I can be helped!
Questions --
  1. On pages 93 & 94, Franklin talks about words being irrelevant. Does he explain this well enough that we all buy into it?
  2. Can we discuss more in depth what Franklin means by the developmental focuses? I had a difficult time understanding where to draw the line between the complication and the first focus, and also the third focus and the resolution. I also want to hear other thoughts on why there must always be three.
  3. Is Franklin to quick to shut out ideas entirely? He seems a bit harsh in some respects, but maybe his harshness is just what beginning writers need to hear. While reading I sat back and wondered about my own first assignment. Do I have have each of the parts he describes? Do I as the character resolve my complication?

Response to "Jacob's Ladder"


     What an interesting and informative article!
     While I don’t know as much about profiles, and hope to learn more in class this evening, I thought the author did a nice job in combing facts about Zuma’s life as well as history needed for the reader to understand the context of it.
     Some pieces flowed more smoothly, for instance, when the author spoke directly about Zuma’s personal life I was much more interested and engaged, as opposed to when he delved deeply into the political side of Zuma’s life.
     The piece was overall intriguing and educational, and I believe it was well-executed. 

Response to "Emergence"


     I have to be honest - I’ve never before listened to a podcast. Emergence was my first. I was pleasantly surprised! 
     I payed a lot of attention to the background noise used on the podcast, and there was a lot to pay attention to! I really think that the music and other sounds almost always added to whatever the speakers were speaking on. I especially liked that in many instances the real voices of the people the broadcasters were talking about were used in previously recorded interviews. Hearing the voices of the actual experts was really powerful.
     I found the actual topic of the podcast very interesting. The broadcasters were able to keep it light by frequently changing subjects while still remaining with the overall topic. Again, the noises used added to this light and fun feeling in the midst of the real news being discussed. 
     I really appreciated the bits concerning the psychology behind Google. How interesting! I also couldn’t help but Google Steven Johnson - He’s number four behind Steve Madden Shoes (1 & 2) and Steven Spielberg (3) - Not Steven Curtis Chapman.
     I want to know why Emily and Elaine chose this piece. Are the podcasts from Radio Lab always really fantastic? Is this the most non-podcast-listening-friendly podcast?

Monday, April 2, 2012

Writing Process - Spoiled Rotten


     I had a difficult time thinking of one specific idea for this piece. I’m still unsure of the topic I selected. Hungary as a whole was a pivotal moment in my life, and it’s quite obvious that it would be impossible to stretch those five months into one 900-1700 word essay. Grocery shopping and cooking continue to be a difficult thing for me to do. Hungary showed me that I could do it; that I was independent enough to actually feed myself. No one else was responsible for making sure I was fed and healthy. Silly as it may sound, that truly was a new and terrifying experience for me. I didn’t get great at it, I ate a lot more starch than I’m sure one should eat while abroad, but at least I threw in the eggs for protein!

     I absolutely would like to know if you all think this is an idea I can expand and hone in on to make it a “lives” worthy story. I haven’t done too much reflecting on my journey abroad at this point. People keep asking how the trip was - it was amazing. How to write down the things that changed in you or the experiences you had, simply to choose one? So many questions. As I’m writing this of course I’ve just had a thought of another funny abroad moment. It involves a horrifying travel experience. Better? Worse? Thoughts are oh-so-welcome!

Spoiled Rotten


I used to complain about cafeteria food on my small college campus. It upset my stomach, they weren’t serving what I was in the mood for, it smelled funny, and the list goes on. We are required by Kalamazoo College to live on campus for nearly three full years before unleashing us into, another United States city for a study-away program, or like in my case, another country for study-abroad. Two days in Hungary and the ease of that cafeteria was a far-off dream.

  I had studied and written about Hungarian culture for months before traveling to Budapest. I knew things about Communism, battles they’d lost, that it was strange to smile at strangers, not to hail a cab on the street, but rather to call ahead. What else did I need to know? 

  One thing. Many fewer people speak English than anticipated. No “crash course” in Hungarian had been provided by Kalamazoo College, the academic portion of the program was to be taught solely in English. These as well as two visits to a rural French town where many or most spoke English indicated to me that many people in Hungary would also speak English. I was traveling to Europe after all.

Wrong. While many Hungarians between 15-30 speak English, many of those whom are employees of the supermarkets do not. 

Day one: jet lag.

Day two: tackle Hungarian daily life.

  Our dorms in Hungary came equipped with a full kitchen. Stove top, full size refrigerator and accompanying freezer - much much more than what I had experienced in my two years of dorm life at K. It was finally time to tackle cooking. At school in the past I’d gone grocery shopping on several occasions of course, but never for food that would be cooked anywhere other than my microwave. At home, meals were often bought or cooked for my younger sister and I. This alongside the impatience of both parents to pass on any skill at cooking they’d acquired over their 40 some years has left Hannah and I fairly inadequate in a kitchen setting. 

     Crazy as it may seem, learning to cook for the first time on your own is not made easier by living in a foreign country where not only can you not understand labels, but certain elements of a gleaming US superstore are missing in a Hungarian corner market.

     Vegetables and fruits were easy. Bread was easy, although I did try a few different types as I wanted to try many, and in America bread typically lasts a week or two. Cheese was difficult, all of the names were different, and I am not such a guru that I can decide which I want based on texture or color. Meat to some degree you know the look of, but when "csirke" means turkey rather than chicken, things tend to get a little messy. Cognates don't quite exist in Hungarian. All sauces, chips, crackers, soups, yogurts, etc. were a toss up. 

  Another poor American habit, or perhaps a Peterson bad habit is to grocery shop til’ we drop. Almost always, we tend to leave the grocery store with a car load. (Thanks to preservatives for not allowing us to go bankrupt). My Hungarian shopping experience was no different.

While the corner market, Spar, was without a cart to fully load, I managed to drag an overflowing basket to the checkout counter. Spending a whole lot too much, and realizing too late grocery bags and groceries were not a package deal in Hungary, I managed to cause quite the stir in basic English and hand gestures. We communicated “plastic bag” with a point accompanied with a carrying motion similar to cradling a baby. Another charge of the credit card and I was off with four or five plastic bags full of fruits, vegetables, cheese, mystery meat, and anything else I didn’t need to understand the label for. (Thank God I have no food allergies!)

People stared as I climbed the steep hill toward my dorm building. Carrying the several “Spar” bags - still naive to the cool of carrying an H&M bag rather than a plain grocery store bag - I was blissfully unaware of the mistakes I had made.
Three days later everything spoiled.

Another misconception. Hungarian food is not packed with preservatives or chemicals to extend their shelf lives or plump them up. Hungarians rather make several trips to the market per week, buying only what they are sure they will cook within a day or two.

After that first trip I got better and better at deciphering what was good, what I could consume within a day or two, and names of certain products with the help of Hungarian friends. I also learned what I was able to cook with what means I was given.

  I can make a mean omelet and hash brown breakfast ... lunch ... and dinner! Becoming an independent adult is a work-in-progress, right?